Writing a story

In the class of language we created a story that has to start with a promp sentence (Mark couldn't believe his good luck) and we have to use:
5 connectors
3 sequence markers
2 examples of direct speech


Mark couldn't believe his good luck, everything began at the morning when he woke up and first her mother was making his favorite breakfast, furthermore she let him be upsen in school becouse of the bad winter, when he finished the breakfast he went to his room and saw that he had a new email that said:
Dear Mark,
You have won 5 free tickets to the concert of Maroon 5, It starts at 12 o'clock and a special bus will carry you and your friends to the concert.

Mark was very surprise so he inmediately call his friends to go to the concert and they were free that night, then he told her mother and she gave he 100 dolars to spend in new clothe.
At 10 o'clock he went to the mold to buy the clothe and then instead of going to his house he went to the park where he found all his friends.
-Hi Mark, how are you?, they said
-Oh fine I bought clothe for the concert, he anwered
After that they went to their houses. Despìte of the bad weather he return walking, when he arrived he take a bath amd went to the concert, As a result was the best day of his life.